求高人给作文打一下分,按高考标准,这篇是关于溺爱孩子的,满分25,Asitdepictsinthepictureabove,it’srainingcatsanddogsoutside,andyettheflowerisblossomingout.However,oncefacedwiththestormdirectly,theflowerca-简笔画问答网

求高人给作文打一下分,按高考标准,这篇是关于溺爱孩子的,满分25,Asitdepictsinthepictureabove,it’srainingcatsanddogsoutside,andyettheflowerisblossomingout.However,oncefacedwiththestormdirectly,theflowerca

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求高人给作文打一下分,按高考标准,这篇是关于溺爱孩子的,满分25,

Asitdepictsin

thepictureabove,it’srainingcatsanddogsoutside,andyetthefloweris

blossomingout.However,oncefacedwiththestormdirectly,theflowercannot

standagainstthestormanymore.

Theprofound

meaningofthepicturecanbeelaboratedintermsofthe“GreenHouse”phenomenon,

whichpointesdirectlytothespoiledchildrenaswellastheirparents.Byno

meansisthephenomenonuncommoninoursociety.Itseverelyresultedinwhat

wecall“delicatechildren”.SoIdoreckonthatit’simperativetotakesome

measuresbeforethesituationdeteriorates.Parentsshouldtaketheir

responsibilitytomaketheirchildrenexposedtoauthenticsocietyand

adversity,whichwilldefinitelycontributetothechildren’smentalhealthinthelongrun.

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　　Hi,smartkidthere! 　　youressayisreaaaalyimpressive!ImustsayIneverseeachildatyouragecapableofwritingsoorganizedandresonably.Bytheway,'rainingcatsanddogs'-----funnyusage!Niceshot 　　Basically,nogrammarmistakesandadequatewordchoices.Oweyourhardwork,ofcourse. 　　Yet,atinnypointmightneedtobeelaborated.Thefirstparagraphandthesecondoneshallbeconnectedmoreneatly.Thatmeansyoumaypointout'whoistheflower'and'whatthethunderstormstandsfor/symbolizes'Icancatchyourpointthere,butorganizingyouressaycoherentlyisprettyimportant. 　　Thewordchoiceyoumakeisveryaccurateandauthentic.Ilovetheexpressionlike'delicatechildren''inthelongrun'andetc. 　　SoIguess23/25mightbegoodenough.Keepthepaceonandmindtoconnectthepicturewithyourargument. 　　Kyon,bestregards